Works-In-Progress

12/2/2016

Moving Forward: In terms of moving forward for this particular project, I need to delve further into the processes that went into the producing of the particular ideas that I stressed in my opening statement of arguement and connect these to the overarching themes entailed into the learning objectives. I, also, need to design an alternate form of communication through the creation of a prezi or another form of electronic communication. This will further support the multimodality of my particular statements and reinforce my ideas.

Working Statement of Arguement:

I have always treated the sciences as one of the most crucial and neceassry parts of an academic career. Throughout the majority of my high school experience, however, science was viewed and treated as  a simple end as opposed to a means to an end. Science was treated as results instead of a tool to guide our minds and principles in an ever-changing world.These results were obtained and conveyed in the most appropriate manner that dictated the needs of the particular situation. It was found in this course, however, that with appropriate application of the processes and techniques used in the employment of the numerous aspects of the rhetorical process that science can act as the direct medium for the conveying of a message much larger than that of just conveying findings, data, or statistics. By means of utilizing the rhetorical process in order to develop th epotential of delivering a message to a larger audience with a multitude of different interests relating to both social and cultural principles, science can be viewed as the bridging that closes the gap between the academic world and the world of common application and can be used to deliver new thoughts and perspectives on how daily life can and should be conducted.

 

As the gradual development in writing seeks to appeal to a larger audience that naturally encompasses larger ideas, points of views, and ways of life, critical thinking becomes a necessary aspect when developing a correspongding arguement. In my blog post, “Culture or Computers?” I seek to illustrate that point exactly by considering the necessary social, cultural, and economic points of view that went into the development of the article and, in doing so, stregthen respective idea conveyed in my writing by offering a narrative different than that of what is typically seen. As depicted when I claimed:

“This same science which has uncovered the boundless bounties of the earth has, however, left many in want as the rapidly streamlining and demanding requests of technology set in deeper and deeper, often on a cultural level as tradition and generational practice must give way to the global demands of a global market.”

Through this quote, outline both the benefits and deficiencies of being a part of a society almost whole heartedly goverened by the presence of technology to facilitate the natural processes of life. I broaden my claims by appealing to the cultural aspects that have the ability to be lost as the processes of mechanization remove a number of different people away from what can be described as traditional lifestyles governed by generations of unbroken practice. Through this claim, I desired to drive the audience to gradually contemplate the cultural background behind what goes into the creation of a modern society that drastically changes cultural normalities. I also sought to maitain my respective idea throughout the duration of the writing by means of utilizing quotes that emphasized my respective idea such as:

“‘Are you going to feel happy after visiting this village?'”

This helped to add a voice to my particular writing piece and give character to my idea by giving it cultural context as it is being explained by someone else who lives in a society that lacks much of the technological advancement seen elsewhere. Thus, by giving quotes, a price is associated with having to live with technology which asserts the fact that technology has differeing impacts on cultural landscapes and development.

 

 

 

The three things that I enjoyed in the Values of Science: Compassion project included the setup where the two points of view were established and cmae together in the end in order to deliver the final theme. I liked the two different texts that were used a TED talk and a documentary that are both concerning animals. The writing was displayed character but could use more in the way of incorporating more quotes and explanations of the quotes.

Quotation Sandwich (11/2/2016):

Culture or Computers: Original

“Are you going to feel happy after visiting this village?”

 

This question posed by Bhawana Singh towards Jake Abrahamson in his article, “Waiting for Light,” echoes deeply throughout the field of science and, one could argue, the world in general. It brings up an intricate point concerning to what extent science has in the creation of happiness and purpose for those who select to engage in the multitudes of benefits science has to offer. For some, science has created purpose, for others reason, and for everyone relative ease and a facilitation of general life. Science has raised many above the socio-economic standards imposed on them by previous occurrences or set standards. This same science that has raised so many from poverty has, also, worked to bring goods and services from all around the world to be conveniently accessed by almost all. Science was quite literally responsible for the global transformation in the economic system that saw the price of commodities systematically fall while living standards for all rose dramatically and access to cleaner, more reliable sources of food, water, fuel, shelter, and more became completely normal.

Culture or Computers Modified:

A mango sunset descended over a rural Indian village taking with it any assemblage of work, creativity, routine, or daily life and filling that void with the ceaseless chirping of crickets that melded with the endless black sea that encompassed the land. Night had come. One could no longer see the dung-and-mud huts that dotted the landscape or the wooden plows that the farmers still used; the buffalo were quite and the women had left their looms and the fires of each house managed to die down into a meagre sliver of light in the dark, relative to that of a single birthday candle. This village lacked the comforts of the modern world and the people’s actions reflected it; the buffalo’s were milked by hand and the thought of many inhabitants of the village focused primarily on how this years harvest could be sold. And yet, regardless of all of this, one question still remained:

 

“Are you going to feel happy after visiting this village?”

 

This question posed by Bhawana Singh towards Jake Abrahamson in his article, “Waiting for Light,” echoes deeply throughout the field of science and, one could argue, the world in general. It brings up an intricate point concerning to what extent science has in the creation of happiness and purpose for those who select to engage in the multitudes of benefits science has to offer. For some, science has created purpose, for others reason, and for everyone relative ease and a facilitation of general life. Science has raised many above the socio-economic standards imposed on them by previous occurrences or set standards. This same science that has raised so many from poverty has, also, worked to bring goods and services from all around the world to be conveniently accessed by almost all. Science was quite literally responsible for the global transformation in the economic system that saw the price of commodities systematically fall while living standards for all rose dramatically and access to cleaner, more reliable sources of food, water, fuel, shelter, and more became completely normal.

 

 

 

“Curiosity” by Kim Todd, 10/28/2016

In her article, Todd’s arguement supports that curiosity is more physiologically and, even, biologically driven than anything. This can be seen through her reference to Min Jeong Kang’s in conjunction with Cal Tek where a number of students were asked a series of engaging questions and their following brain activity was recorded and monitored.The students were asked a number of engaging questions such as, “What other animal besides humans can experience a sunburn?” It was seen that the students had a flurry of rapid brain and nervous system activity where the students pupils dilated and they had increased activity within the prefrontal cortex (page 278). I interpreted this meaning to display that humans have an innate desire and are biologically programmed to seek out new information that goes beyond simple survival and delves into the complexities of nature and the world in general.

Emily Graslie TED Talk:

In Emily Graslie’s Ted Talk regarding curiosity, she claimed that people and not technology are the bedrock of curiosity. Through her depiction of a metiorite, she explained the story of how a group of scientists collectively carbon-dated a sample found in a white part of the meteor and wereable to determine how old a part of the universe was. This explains that everything has a story behind it that it can contribute to science and our growing curiosity and sometimes the items that are not the most beautiful orprestine can have the most to add to our collective knowledge.

a. This is important as it helps to outline how the universe was created and, therefore, where all life comes from and, in doing so, proves an important theory of einstein that has been around for about 100 years.

b. Our audience probably presumes to have at least a general knowledge about the universe and the creation of the universe as well as who Albert Einstein is and the topics that his work concerned.

The medium/genre that we will be analyzing and reproducing will be about the LIGO experiment that two professors and students have been a part of: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tu64i49Y_ps. This video is aimed at the general audience interested in the LIGO experiment and employs visuals that help the audience understand the complicated idea. Our representation of the project will be a short article of around 500 words aimed at the general audience, meaning one of the qualities of the videos will be changed.

The short article is composed of images, some gifs, and a written format of the video. A person will be in charge of summarizing the article, another will be preparing the images and the analysis of it etc. However, all of us will take part in the assignment, so we will be in charge of all of the parts. We will hopefully meet once a week to overview our progress.

For our transforming tech science project, my group is panning onutilizing the TECH+knowledge+Y video on gravitational observed waves in order to create a short article.

Here is the link to the video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tu64i49Y_ps

Differences- The differences between the work of Toon and Cole includes the fact that Toon uses more direct quotes in order to describe the subject in direct detail while COle utilizes a more informal tone in order to give a general background on the topic. Also, the length of Cole’s article is very short which gives the impression that it is meant for readers who are not looking for an in-depth study but, rather, something quick to look at for entertainment. This idea is further enforced by Cole’s use of motion pictures in order to captivate the attention of an audience instead of simply reporting facts. Cole’s article explains in depth many of the different fields of study and work that went into the creation of the robot. The GT news articel has a citation for its composition. In addition, the GT news article provides media contacts that allow readers to reach out to the researchers behind the displayed work. The Popsci article is a lot more entertaining and is surrounded by articles about games and other fun things.

If I plan to revise, I will work on changing ideas up some, but I do not plan to revise a great deal.

Madison (Peer Review Grade): Rhetorical Awareness-Develpoping, could talk more about the context of the ad and the audience. Stance -competent, does well in addressing the issue. Development in ideas-Competent, solid ideas are developed, but some sound very similar. Organization- competent, organization is clear and concise. Conventions- competent, not very many mistakes easily found. Design for medium-competent

Vishnu-Rhetorical awareness-Developing, Stance-competent,Development of ideas-competent, organization-mature, convention-developing, design for medium-competent.

Work on-  After having my project peer reviewed several times, I found that I needed to vary the ideas in my project more often. In addition to this, I should have addressed the context of the advertisement such as where it was displayed or more. I should, however, keep the organization of my product and the spacing of ideas.

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Spinning Science Project Introduction and Writing:

Introduction:
It is common knowledge that too much sugar can be a bad thing, but a print advertisement from the SugarScience website seeks to convince readers that too much sugar can be deadly. Through their depiction of an expressionless child consuming a beverage that can be assumed to contain a rather large quantity of sugar, the SugarScience website seeks to utilize science to explain that the consumption of excess sugar can have devastating effects which are listed on certain parts of the child’s body and range from diabetes to liver and heart disease. These maladies, harmful and long-lasting, attract the attention of the audience because not only are they deadly but they are found in a child who should, under normal circumstances, be healthy. The melancholic colors that compose the background of the advertisement present a gloomy setting which suggest that the effects of consuming sugar on a large scale can lead to equally miserable outcomes. The large text in the upper-right corner of the text draws the eyes of the reader and explains how critical organs are often overworked as the result of consumption of large quantities of sugar. The smaller text towards the bottom of the advertisement clearly states facts about the correlation between consuming beverages high in sugar and heart disease. The overall advertisement is meant to create a morbid image in the mind of the reader that focuses on the devastating impacts that excess sugar can have on the body of a child and ultimately the future as an inability to decrease sugar intake can lead to debilitating disease or, even, death.

Writing:

 

The purpose of this print advertisement from sugerscience.org is to convince the general public of the harmful impacts which are implicit in the excess consumption of sugar. It should first be noted that there is an outline of a child as the center piece for the advertisement. This outline is meant to provide more of a general look for a child and not attach a particular identity to any one child in particular in order to allow readers to picture either themselves as the child pictured or other children who may be close to the reader to be pictured. By not assigning a particular identity to the child in the advertisement, the advertisement appeals to the pathos of the observer by allowing them to assign their own identity to the blank outline and, therefore, evoke their own emotions regarding the negative implications of the consumption of sugar in children. In addition to the general outline provided, the color scheme should be noted; the background of the advertisement consists of a dark blue color which contrasts strongly with the light blue color that the child outline is portrayed in. The stark contrasts force the reader’s eyes to be drawn to the outline of the child, thus, further forcing the reader to place him or herself in the place of the child outlined. In terms of colors, the white color of much of the text depicted, also, contrasts strongly with the dark-blue outline which makes the message being conveyed through text clear and easy to read without much distraction or confusion. The yellow text, which is significantly larger than the other words being displayed, is meant to direct the focus of the reader by highlighting key words such as “Soda” and “Sports drinks” in order to inform and shock the reader with surprising locations that contain large amounts of hidden sugar that are consumed normally on a daily basis. In addition to colors, words themselves can have a strong connotation and evoke a wide range of emotions in an audience, and the use of meaningful words such as “Heart Disease”, “Diabetes”, and “Liver Disease” can seek to utilize pathos by associating these debilitating, long-term diseases with innocent children who have their entire lives ahead of them and should not be limited. The string of dots leading from the drink the child is consuming to the areas of the child’s body that have the ability to be impacted display the negative impacts of sugar by displaying a direct correlation between the consumption of sugar and the likeliness of obtaining life-long diseases such as diabetes and heart or liver disease. The presentation of statistics and facts can work to convince a general audience by showing that there is concrete data to support a specific opinion, and this data is seen in the lower, left-hand corner of the advertisement where sugarscience.org claims, “Drinking just one 12-oz. soda every day or seven sodas per week, can increase your risk of dying from heart disease by almost 1/3. Heart disease is the leading cause of death in the U.S.” By utilizing statistics and facts, the creators of the advertisement seek to use logos in convincing the audience by showing that even an act as small as consuming one 12-oz. soft drink a day can greatly increase one’s risk of dying from heart disease which is meant to discourage the reader from consuming excessive amounts of sugar by claiming that doing so can lead to pre-mature death. The advertisement in question seeks to appeal to the reader’s sense of ethos by claiming in the lower, right-hand corner of the print ad that SugarScience is a leading source of information as they have gathered evidence and followed the scientific guidelines when compiling their facts.    sugarscience_beverages

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